Wednesday, June 24, 2009

Flash fiction: Betrayal

If you enjoy writing short stories, check out the Fiction Friday challenges by Jeanne at The Raisin Chronicles.

This week's challenge was/is: to write a piece of "flash fiction" - a short story of 100 words or less that begins with the phrase -

"We had differing agendas."
If you're interested in joining the fun, click on the link above.

Here's my story for this week.


We had differing agendas. You wanted to be a free-spirit; making no commitments, going where and when you pleased. I did everything I could to win you over; bribing, cajoling, threatening. Nothing seemed to make an impression.

I was infuriated by the stench of your lies. How many times had you assured me there was nothing going on? How many times had I believed your empty promises; that you loved me, that you would come to me when your need grew too great, that it would never happen again.

“What’s that smell?”

“Daddy, me no need use potty!”


Microsoft says that's 99 words. Hope you enjoyed them.

Take care.


Sprite's Keeper said...

Oh! This speaks to me! Love it!

Captain Dumbass said...

Bwah ha ha! That was great!

Jim Styro said...

S.K. & Cap'n: Thanks for the kind words. I thought it turned out pretty well. Thankfully, this is a memory from the distant past for me. But clearly a vivid one.